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Today’s six comes from my still in process NaNo cruise ship romance, title to be determined.
In this six, our hero, Paul, is standing in a long coffee line, in a hurry and observably impatient. Unbeknownst to him, Lydia, our heroine, is right behind him in the same line. This scene is very similar to the opening scene when they first met, except their roles are reversed. Lydia is going to get her revenge, albeit a highly sugar-coated form.
Macchiato art (Photo credit: David Robert Wright)
From behind him, he heard a woman say, “There’s one in every crowd.”
Instantly his impatience dissolved, replaced by a smile that couldn’t be sandblasted off his face. Turning he said, “Yes, always that one barista who is way too much of a perfectionist.”
“I just hate that,” Lydia said, her mouth hitched up on one side in a mocking grin.
“Cutting it close, aren’t you?”
“Only one coffee later than you,” she said, bumping him with her shoulder.
I love me some good banter with a little bit of touching.
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Jessica Subject
December 16, 2012 at 7:57 AM (UTC -7) Link to this comment
Cute! I like how she made him relax.
S. J. Maylee
December 16, 2012 at 8:57 AM (UTC -7) Link to this comment
“Only one coffee later than you,”<–she's totally charming. Fun 6.
My coffee is tasting pretty good this morning, but I want the coffee in that picture
jamieleighhaden
December 16, 2012 at 9:17 AM (UTC -7) Link to this comment
Wonderful, I love this!
Taryn Kincaid
December 16, 2012 at 9:57 AM (UTC -7) Link to this comment
Love the smile that couldn’t be sandblasted off his face!
siobhanmuir
December 16, 2012 at 10:25 AM (UTC -7) Link to this comment
I love that her remarks setting him down and return his humor. Great six, Claire.
sueannbowlingauthor
December 16, 2012 at 11:34 AM (UTC -7) Link to this comment
Love the “one in every crown.” Especially when you’re in a hurry.
Sandra Bunino (@SandraBunino)
December 16, 2012 at 1:45 PM (UTC -7) Link to this comment
Sweet banter between these two! Would you hurry up and finish this already, Ms. G. I SO want to read it!
Silver James
December 16, 2012 at 1:51 PM (UTC -7) Link to this comment
Love the sandblasted line! Wish I’d thought of it.
Well done, Claire.
Angela Quarles
December 16, 2012 at 7:20 PM (UTC -7) Link to this comment
Love the banter too, this is a cute six!
Ryan Derham
December 19, 2012 at 11:33 AM (UTC -7) Link to this comment
I like their exchange, smart and fun!